AUTHOR: Patricia Scott
PUBLISHER: Wild Rose Press
LENGTH: Novella (roughly 35k)
GENRE: Time travel romance
COST: $4.50
In a quest to prove her family is entwined with the Semples, Sara Templeton goes to
Though there might be a good idea somewhere in this novella, it’s lost amidst the technical weaknesses of the prose. It starts almost from the beginning. The prologue can’t decide on a verb tense, and it jerks me out of the story almost before it’s begun. It doesn’t improve very much once it starts, either. There’s continuity problems (the hero calls the heroine by name without being told it, a guide refers to Sara’s family history when Sara never said a word about being her family, and so on), there’s information dumps (how many times did I need to learn about the silver buckle at the auction?), and spelling mistakes (i.e., cliental for clientele). With that much going wrong – not to mention the excessive passive voice – it’s very hard to get into it.
Sara arrives in
I just can’t think of much in this that might recommend it. A good idea just isn’t enough.
Readability | 4/10 – Passive voice, lack of clarity, continuity errors, spelling mistakes…there was just so much wrong with this, it took me forever to slog through |
Hero | 4/10 – Seems nice enough, but the characterizations in this are so flat that it’s hard to see any kind of potential |
Heroine | 3/10 – Personality is all over the place, with no rational explanations for some her snap judgments |
Entertainment value | 3/10 – It could have been a nice idea if there’d been any sort of clarity or consistency |
World building | 5/10 – Bare bones, mostly on the historical stuff |
TOTAL: | 19/50 |
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